Warning: This review contains course language and sexual scenarios. Viewer discretion is advised.

Hello, everypony. I am the Critique.

For those of you who missed last week, a psychopath basically tried to kill me. Currently, he’s being held by Canterlot’s finest, so I guess that’s a bonus. However, we had the destruction of my library also. So, currently, I am at a local college posting my review there.

Fortunately, Computer and Celestia both tell me that the new library should be up and functional next week, but until then I have to move in with my parents. … Yeah, not looking forward to that.

On top of that, the Mayor of Ponyville is blaming me for the damages to the library, even though I tried to explain to him that a psycho tried to kill me. But of course, since he hates me for some unexplained reason, he will not listen to anything I say.

Oh, and since the terrorist attacked me in my home, Computer has been forced to reside in my phone until the new library has been rebuilt. As for the mysterious basement that we found, we haven’t really gotten around to investigating it. But based on preliminary scans, it’s just a hidden room with nothing in it. Why somepony would have such a thing is beyond me? Hopefully, we’ll turn up something and if not we can always use it for storage.

Once the library is back up and running, I’ll most likely be spending the rest of my life working there, since I am being held responsible for the damages.

My life sucks.

And could it possibly get any worse?

Are you ready for your story for today, sir?

No. What is it?

Wonderfall by The Mystery Fluttershy Fan.

Already from the short description of the story, this one is not doing me any favors to my sanity. I’ll let the description speak for itself.

Fluttershy needs to heal her wings and since I can't expose her existence to any other human, I have to self medicate her, her medication?.... Being completely bound until she heals. I then try something for the first time. Watersports....

But not ordinary typical making her drink my pee or bathing her in it, no she had an idea I'd never even considered. I complied and it was one hell of an intense night,

Oh god. It’s one of THOSE stories…

Bear in mind… I haven’t even started the story yet and I am shitting bricks, guys. I am literally shitting bricks! … Well, let’s jump into WonderFall and get this over with.

So, the story starts off with our main character bringing Fluttershy into his home. This is the exact reverse of a Human in Equestria story, but it will probably not be anything better.

"It's good to be back Master". I follow her in and close the door behind us.

Oh, dear lord. I can’t tell if the character’s name is Master or that is just a title that Fluttershy is giving him. Either way, that’s pretty messed up. Is Fluttershy his slave or something?

If so, she’s pretty damn okay with it. I would say, uncharacteristically so, but I’ll get to that in a minute.

I sit in my computer chair and I start to browse some of my favourite websites to see what I've missed.

“I hope everyone really likes this new story I’m writing. It’s called My Little Unicorn! I think people will really enjoy it! It’s way better than Friendship is Magic.”

So he starts boasting about how he has his own personal Fluttershy to do all his bidding, including pleasuring him and his friends, who have an orgy with her.

One, Ewww…

Two, you’re an idiot!

Three, How the does Fluttershy get into the human world anyway? Seriously, it’s never explained! It is never explored upon and it never even hinted at! Do ponies just come out of the T.V show and go to the human world whenever they want? That’s really stupid!

I know there are not many original ways for ponies to get to the human world, or humans to Equestria, but you really think that no explanation is a good explanation?

I just casually browsed my Tumbler, which contained a lot of pony porn, very regularly featuring the pink maned, yellow coated filly sitting on my lap. I did feel a bit uncomfortable about her seeing it after a while and decided to just go to the more innocent pony discussion on Facebook. I could feel my trousers become tight as my penis became aroused by the warmth on top of it.

Oh, so you’re a horny bastard with no redeemable qualities about you whatsoever? I’m so glad you’re the main character in this story! I would hate to have a character with “Moral standards” or “a sense of right and wrong”! That would just be stupid!

Oh, and let’s not forget about Fluttershy. After all, I’m sure you watching pictures of your friends sexing up her and her friends would not get any kind of reaction from her at all. After all, that’s normal right? You and your friends showing off images of your naked girlfriends to one another? That’s perfectly legit, right?! Any girlfriend would allow that, right?!

I mean, it’s not like it’s perverted and violates their right to… Oh, wait… IT DOES, YOU ASSHAT!

I mean, seriously?! This is acceptable behavior to you?!

What? Is Fluttershy so low on the level of intelligence that she doesn’t even have basic rights?! My god, it’s called ‘humanity’. You should probably get some!

Oh, and I haven’t even mentioned the perverted standards here. It’s okay for you and your friends to rape her together, but it’s not okay for you to look up pony porn while she’s sitting in the same room?

"You really are a dream come true Fluttershy, I love you" I say sweetly as I nibble the tip of her pointy ear affectionately.

“And, by ‘I love you’, that means I in no way respect you as an intelligent creature, but a sex object that I can push any scenario I want to without repercussions because you are just a tool for my sexual fantasies. “

That… doesn’t sound like love…

“Do I need to invite my friends over for another threesome?”

I don’t like this very much…

So, apparently we get some backstory on Fluttershy first arriving in the human world (which really ends up with him saying, “She magically appeared”) and get a load of this fucking bullshit.

I was the one who broke her wings... I raped her... painfully.

Yes, but it was mostly painful for the audience.

Despite all that though, she was staying with me since I promised her freedom. I felt guilty and I let her go, but I begged her not to leave the house and reveal her existence to the general human population.

Wait a minute, you say you want to release her, but then you beg her not to go? What the hell is wrong with you?! God, you change your mind more than a Mary Sue changes eye colors!

She must have enjoyed what I did to her on some instinctual level, because now she wanted sex all the time and ever since then we had done it a lot and consensually.

Well, pfft, of fucking course! I mean, he only RAPED her, broke her wing and held her against her will while she apparently is so broken up that she has to be tied up to heal properly (we’ll get to that in a fucking minute).

And, of course, as ANYONE who has ever been raped will tell you, it’s super easy to forgive the person responsible because deep down, you enjoyed it! You fucking enjoyed it!

Yeah, it’s just like having a family member you deeply care about being murdered, but forgive the murderer super easily because deep down you know that you thought it was enjoyable!

Or like when you watch your kid get hit by a drunk driver, but you forgive the drunk driver super easily because deep down you thought it was hilarious!

So, the character starts to fiddle with Fluttershy’s wing to find out how badly damaged it is, because I’m sure pulling violently on it will help! He’s says the wing is badly damage and that he needs to push the bones back in their proper place to heal and that it is going to hurt.

"Oh okay... Go ahead then, I know you like it when I am in pain and stuff, so I won't hold back on the noise". She says.

Oh, good. He’s abusive, a rapist, and a psychotic! Clearly the definition of manly right here, people! And of course, Fluttershy is not objective at all, because she clearly doesn’t have a brain or any rights for herself as she is just a sex object. That makes it convenient for anything you want to do. I’m so glad you sucked out Fluttershy’s brain so that you could make her your stupid sexual puppet.

So, he starts to have violent sex with her as he probes her wings. … Lord, I feel like I need a shower after that sentence… And then proceeds to… You know what, every time I am forced to read a sex scene with Fluttershy, I am going to put a sad image of Fluttershy crying. That way, each and every one of you will be able to feel my pain, without being tormented by the horrible images that I now have stuck in my mind…

"It says here I need to bind your wings, so that you can't move them, even accidently, it suggests I bind you up completely". I explain as a grin appears on my face.

… … Are you fucking kidding me?!

Okay, One: This same injury happened to Rainbow Dash in the Episode where we are first introduced to Daring Doo!

Yeah, as you can see, Rainbow Dash, clearly needs to be bound for her entire body, even though it is only her freaking wing that needs healing!

Two, if you are using a bird care website, it is not recommended that you completely bind the bird! You tend to the wing that is injured, but leave the other one alone, so that is doesn’t lose muscle function!

Three, don’t tell me that this story was written before Read it and Weep! That’s bullshit! The episode appeared on February 4, 2012. This story was written an entire year later!

So the only, ONLY reason he is tying her up, is because he is a sick twisted bastard who only wants to tie her up so he can have perverted bondage sex with her! Go to hell, whatever the fuck your name is!

So, he ties her up and throws her in a dungeon and here I am praying that Spike comes in with his bulky body and kills this guy. Also, where the hell did he get the money for a dungeon?! What is this guy?! Bowser from Super Mario Brothers or something?!

"Yes... Its fine." She sighs. "I'm only doing this because you've been really nice, and for my wings otherwise I'd never go back down here...".

Oh, yes. This guy is just soooo likeable! A rapist! A psychotic! A pervert! A sadist! He’s truly the hero of this story! I’m so glad that Fluttershy found and trusts this USELESS PIECE OF MOTHER FUCKING SHIT!

Also, does being nice include having you perform a foursome with his equally perverted friend (assuming of course this person actually has friends) and making you watch pony porn of yourself and your friends? I didn’t know that was on the same level of compassion as saving someone’s life or nursing them back to health.

And don’t give me this bullshit about him nursing you back to health. It should be clear by now that he doesn’t have your best interest at heart! I was joking about the Fluttershy’s brain being sucked out of her body, but now that’s the only explanation I can come up with for the reason she is acting so stupid!

"That's a good slave" I grin as I secure her starting with her ankles.

She frowns as she is called slave, fearing you're going back to how you were. "Um... My name is Fluttershy, remember? I don't like Slave..."

"But... you've been calling me master" I say as I secure her knees quickly.

"It was to make you happy, Master... Its just... I don't like you calling me slave, it feels like back when you first trapped me down here... and that was horrible, for me at least..."

Then why the fuck are you letting him do this to you?! I know Fluttershy wasn’t the most assertive character in the show, but come fucking on, people!

Maybe this is why Fluttershy is always put into these situations! The author thinks she is so submissive that she will do absolutely anything that they want her to! Bull-fucking-shit!

Fluttershy has demonstrated, several times, that she is capable of asserting herself! But what do I expect from a horny asshole?!

So, “the master” , Oh fuck it, I’m renaming him “Horned Toad”, because he is as disgusting as a toad and all he is interested in is sex. That does not for a good character make!

Mr. Toad finishes tying up Fluttershy and says that after three weeks, he will allow Fluttershy to do the same to him. I have no idea why Fluttershy would want to after spending one day with this sex craved idiot, but then again, I didn’t have the author suck out my brain before writing me!

And then… Cue Sad Fluttershy video…

So, yeah, the next 2000 words is just him describing how he loves to rape Fluttershy and how he can make Fluttershy do all these things for him and how Fluttershy, even though she clearly established that she doesn’t like being called a slave, loves being called a slave!

Yeah, very consistent writing, asshole!

And it’s like this through most of the story, with very little else happening. And it ends up making this story completely boring! Seriously?! There is no plot! There is no struggle! There is nothing to risk or to lose here! It’s just … this asshole raping Fluttershy the entire story! There is nothing here of value or anything worth reading!

So, he goes watersports on her and if you don’t know what that is… Be glad you don’t. I know what it is… And I wish to God that I didn’t.

DON’T YOU DARE LOOK IT UP ON GOOGLE!

So, after that our story finally ends with… I need another sad Fluttershy video…

Do I even have to say anything?

I mean, my god! Forget the bad spelling and grammar on this hunk of shit! This story is the worst story I’ve ever read! Period!

It is offensive! It’s insulting to anyone with more than 4 brain cells! And it incomprehensibly stupid! The story? Nonexistent! The characters? They have no dimension to them! The plot? Nothing! The explanations? Forget it!

Everything about this story, all takes a backseat to the utterly disgusting and horribly drawn out, Fluttershy-rape!

I cried at the end of this story! Not because I actually felt something for the story, but because I felt ashamed! I felt ashamed that I read this story! I felt ashamed that I was a part of this story! I feel ashamed right now promoting the fact that THIS poor piece of utter shit exists!

And to do this to a character who is so fucking innocent and so loving and so caring, just makes me absolutely sick! I am disgusted at myself for reading it! I am disgusted at the author for writing it! And I am disgusted at any reader who enjoyed this garbage when other more talented authors keep getting ignored!

I have never read a story that made me feel completely unclean! This is it, people! I have read some bullshit in my life! But THIS… This… Poorly written, half-ass, offensive, obscene, uninteresting, crude, unpleasant, disgusting, cheap, tedious, nasty, repulsive, revolting, boring story is the worst thing I have ever seen in my entire life!

And that is what I have to say about the good things about it!

I’ll let your imaginations come up with what I have to say about the bad things!

Have a great day guys!

– Most likely where the inspiration for this fic came from. Would make sense, wouldn’t it?