You might have noticed that my comma-splices have been reducing in number, it is all thanks to a wonderful reader who mails me a list of everything wrong with my stories. Well, he decided to turn things around and write something for me to proof read, and it fits right here. It is optional, but he has granted me the right to use these characters, and I intend to.

Asymmetric Everything

by jeffh4

The train wheels rattled on the tracks from time to time, and Shining marked the distance traveled by the itch of the last few members of his hive coming closer—or as was really the case, he was getting nearer to them. "How much longer, do you think?" The only pony he trusted for this particular task was using her magic to lift his tail.

Cadance leaned in and kissed the underside of her husband's dock. "Not much longer, love. You aren't very big at all now, and there is a definite pair of lips forming." She nuzzled down past his tail hole and kissed the slowly forming feminine lips. Lapping at the spot, she closed her eyes and remembered the clone of herself, and how well Shining could squeal.

Shining groaned instead of the squeal his wife expected him to make. Closing his eyes, he arched his back into the attention. With his senses relaxed and spread out, Shining Armor felt the incredible flood of love from behind himself. "C-C-Cady… not like this…" He struggled for every word, every breath.

After a few more loving licks, Cadance subsided. " 'Not like this'?" She gave her husband a lick along those black, puffy lips. "Or did you want to try something else?" Nuzzling back up, she pressed her snout in under his dock and wiggled her nose.

"Cady!" Shining did squeal this time, flopping forward onto the fold-down bed of the sleeper car. Rolling and squirming, he ended up on his back. An expanse of dark chitin rolled out before his eyes: his body. "Come on. I want to cuddle properly."

"A stallion who just wants to cuddle?" Cadance's teasing tone was only a little chiding. She slid up Shining's body—keeping her own belly pressed to her husband's—until she was above him and looking down into his eyes. Studying the slit pupils, Cadance relaxed her forequarters and rested upon Shining. "Your eyes are amazing. Did I tell you that already?"

"No, but you can tell me again." Shining wrapped his hole-filled legs over Cadance and rolled gently to the side. "Yours are still as wonderful as when I first met you." Shining kissed Cadance. "But to say I appreciate what is behind them more now, would be an understatement." He ached to lean in, to push into her and reaffirm their bond with physical lovemaking, but that wouldn't work as he was now.

Cadance watched the flash, watched Shining change not a bit. "Shiny, what are—" Her words were cut short into a happy squeak as a hefty, thick shape pressed against her belly. Groaning and leaning against Shining, she pressed her lips up to one dark ear. "You are ever the stallion for me. Take me."

Flick's eyes were fixed ahead. Her disguise was down—which was disconcerting in pony lands—but it wasn't being exposed that had her blushing and fighting her urge to feed.

"They are at it again." Bright Flash squirmed in place. "Are you okay? You can disguise in here if it would make you more comfortable." The waves of warm love poured over Bright, reminding him why it was so awesome to be a stallion.

"How are you so calm? All this love and we aren't allowed to drink it!" Flick almost sobbed, but her anger kept back the tears. "It just isn't fair!"

Bright was struck dumb a moment, but managed to rouse himself. "Drink. You are allowed to, Queen Cadance prefers we drink off her than other ponies." He watched the anger turn to terror on Flick's face.

"But… she is our queen. We can't do that!" Flick struggled against her loyalty. She had already drunk Queen Cadance's love—it was what made her part of this hive after all—but that had been forced. The temptation to stop fighting was great, but she was a good drone.

"I bet you will, eventually." Bright turned to his side to watch Flick. "Our queens are…" he fished for a word, waving a hoof around in the air, "ravenous. I promise you, they fully intend for you to drink."

Shining rolled to his back, lifting Cadance up atop him. He stared up at her and took in every aspect of his wife.

"Oh, so this one is all on me, is it?" Cadance's tone held no reprimand; she loved being in control of things just as much as she loved giving it to Shining. Bracing her legs, she leaned up and forward. The world slowed down, and Cadance felt every inch of Shining's hefty shaft slide out except for the very tip. Looking down at Shining's face, she couldn't believe she ever saw a hint of Chrysalis in his looks. "I don't plan to disappoint."

"Oh horse-apples…" Shining's eyes stared up at Cadance; stared into her with all his being, and saw the pulsing furnace of love for him. She was an inferno, a firestorm of emotion that he hoped he could reciprocate. She slid down his shaft, forcing each inch of him back into her body greedily; Cadance only stopped when her plot landed on his groin.

Cadance relaxed a moment. She let go the tension in her legs so that she was pressed as tight against Shining as gravity would let her be. She relaxed her pelvic muscles so she could feel all of him inside her. She relaxed her throat and let the sounds her body needed to release, go free. But Cadance couldn't relax like this forever—much as she wished she could—a deep seated need for more took hold and she began to bounce her back end. In and out. Out and in.

Shining's spine bent each time Cadance fell onto him, meeting her body with a thump. He found a rhythm and focused on his part in it. The more Shining drank from Cadance the more stamina he had, and when it came to love, Cadance could feed him all night. A surprise took Shining's attention away from his pace. He looked up to see Cadance's horn glowing brightly, and could taste the sudden, intense waves of love radiating from her.

Flick's eyes went completely wide and she fell from the seat she was on. She couldn't hold back anymore, her mental shield went down and the energy poured through her. "What are… oh… by the egg…" Her words were stilted, almost starting to slur. She looked to Bright Flash—opposite her in the sleeper car—and was surprised to see her hivemate was not incapacitated by the rush.

"Even Misty Dew admits she can't compete with that, but I do enjoy drinking from her. Feel that white-hot burn? Feel the way it seeks out your core and wraps it in energy? I did some experiments, each time our Queen does that it increases our power." Bright flopped to his side on the soft cushions, then rolled to his back and waved his hooves in the air. "Aaaannnndddd I'm drunk too."

"Drunk?" Flick giggled at the other changeling, laughed when his disguise melted under the assault. "What do you mean, 'drunk'?" Even Flick could tell she was slurring.

"That! Exactly that!" Bright waved her legs happily, watching the play of light through her holes. "I have seen Careful Steps shrug this off… he has had more practice." Despite the slight disappointment at Flick's giving in, Bright Flash was still as drunk-happy as any changeling could ever get.

The waves subsided back to the previous "torrent" of energy, for which Flick was thankful. She still couldn't aim her eyes in the right direction, nor get her hooves under her. "How long until it wears off?" The slurring in her voice was quite pronounced now.

"Wear off? Give them five minutes and we will be giggling at our hooves again." Bright curled her legs to her belly, stared up at the roof, and waited.

"You're too much for me, my stallion." Cadance was slumped against Shining's belly, every nerve spent in release, and her mind barely clawing back to all the sense the real world had to offer.

"Too much?" Shining gripped Cadance tightly and rolled her first to her side, then all the way over to her back. His hips didn't need any prompting to pull back and thrust home. "Cady, we are just getting started."

Cadance cried out in pleasure when Shining slipped free of her body. Panting, she watched him slide his body down hers until his head found her belly.

"Do you think anypony has found out yet?" He nuzzled her belly, looking up at the mare of his dreams. She was flush and apparently completely unable to say a word; Cadance shook her head. "They will have to wait." He nuzzled her flat belly a little more, then drifted lower.

"SHINING!" She got a word out, but had no way to control her volume. She screamed Shining's name for all she was worth, while he nuzzled her teats and the flat udders they were attached to. He took one of her sensitive nipples in his mouth and squeezed. Cadance's mind locked up and she knew she was thrashing on the bed—she just didn't care.

Suckling at one of Cadance's little nubs, Shining reached to the second with his magic and gave it a squeezing-pull, a motion that called forth the most amazing scream of pleasure from his wife. Shining drank down the love she pulsed out and drew his mouth back, pulling on her teat gently before letting it go with his teeth. "We aren't even halfway there yet, Cady."

"Again?!" Flick had just managed to regain her legs, and lost them again. She rolled around on the floor, rubbing her cheek against the carpet, the bunks, and anything else she could get near. The whole world was awash in love, and it unwound all her tension inside. The worry about her new hive faded. The worry about her new queens faded. Flick smiled and leaned up to rub her snout against one of Bright's hooves.

"O'course again. I told you!" Bright giggled at the rub against her hoof and used the limb to gently rub Flick's ears. "I can't barely remember being hungry anymore." Flick was completely out of it, butting her head against Bright's hoof constantly now. "And gone already." She smiled down at her hivemate.

Shining turned on the bed, pushing something right into Cadance's face. She stared up blankly for a moment or two until she realized that not only was it her husband's back-end, but he had changed a little more. "I think… Shining hold on." But Shining kept nuzzling around her vulva, doing everything to stimulate and distract her but touch the sensitive folds. "Sh-Shining. You are changed more, like more than since before."

The words did slow Shining's enthusiasm a fraction, and he used only his magic to nuzzle the soft flesh under her clitoris. "I am changing, Cady. I know that, I have accepted it." Shining leaned over his magic to nuzzle Cadance's outer lips gently. "How much of me is—" His words cut off as Cadance nuzzled him and pushed her tongue into him. He knew what it felt like to be given pleasure as a mare, and this was definitely that.

Cadance's actions spoke louder to Shining than her words could. She lapped up and along the split folds of flesh, working her tongue into his body each and every time. When she spotted Shining's clitoris wink out, she quickly reached for it and missed. The second time he winked she got it, trapping the little nub of flesh in her lips and sucking it gently. A moment later she lost her focus again as Shining returned the favor.

Even Bright Flash was losing her focus now. She cuddled up against the other changeling, wrapped her forelegs around them and just hugged. She was full to bursting with love, she had her hive-mates close, and nothing could be going wrong. As more waves of love washed over her, she gave a happy little chirp of her wings and closed her eyes.

Shining was tangled in legs, wings, and his wife. He looked down at their bodies and admired the color mix of pink and black. Outside the window, the last of Galloping Gorge flashed by in the train's race to reach the Crystal Empire. "I'm a mare now. A queen changeling for my hive. I am not a st—"

"You are always my stallion." Cadance pressed herself tighter against Shining, making sure her belly pressed into his. "I have our foal growing inside me, Shining." She gazed up into his eyes with undeviating love. "Besides, is being a mare so bad? I heard you squeal just as loudly as I did."

"Nopony squeals as loudly as you do, Cady." Shining felt the last vestiges of his worry about his masculinity slide back—sure to return, but that was for later. "I am surprised the driver didn't stop the train, thinking there was another blowing its whis— OW!"

"You ninny." Cadance drew her hoof back from the booping she had given her husband. "I don't shout that loud, do I?" Her heart sank when Shining nodded. "What must they think of me?"

"They must think you are a lucky mare to have such an attentive husband to cater to your every wish and desire." Shining waited for the "punishment boop" again, but it never came. Opening his eyes, he watched Cadance's mouth move in and press to his own—"her" own.

Author's Notes:

Empress Amore: "How do you feel about trying to make peace with the Mistress of Motherhood, The Dynast of Desire, The Sovereign of Seduction, The Lady of Lust, The Ruler of Regality Queen Chrysalis?"

"First," Cadance's eyes hardened a little, " 'Empress' is not a title I will wear unless a lot more ponies insist on it. Second," her eyes softened this time, and a half-grin pulled onto her snout, "how much is she paying you to say all that? I left the decision up to 'Emperor Shining Armor,' he was more hurt by her... actions... than I was." She fished for a word for a moment, showing a slight grimace of distaste for even the thought of what Chrysalis did. "How I will feel depends upon how she comes to us, or if we come to her hive for the last of her drones."

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