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Surprise!

by Juu50x

Chapter 1: Surprise!


I DON'T CLAIM ANYTHING!!! MLP: FiM BELONGS TO HASBRO AND LAUREN FAUST!!!!

Surprise!

This is going to be great!” Pinkie thought as she bounced on the somewhat busy streets of Ponyville. ”Now I think I can do it!” She thought with a great happiness. This would be the day she would tell Fluttershy about her feelings. Yes, Pinkie has had a crush on Fluttershy for a while now. But never really actually found the courage, or the right words.

Usually she was the kind of pony who just says what she has to say then finishes it with a big smile and laugh. But this was different kind of matter and no laughing matter. No way. This was much more serious thing. And Pinkie wasn't really good at serious things. Well, mostly.

And this is Fluttershy I'm dealing here...” Pinkie thought, her thoughts becoming a bit more serious and her movements had completely halted when she started thinking more about Fluttershy. “I just can't go to her and be all like: Hi Fluttershy! I like totally, really like, like you! Wanna kiss?” She thought. “She probably would think it was a joke Or worse....” Pinkie thought, suddenly gulping a bit loudly.

And what if I might upset her from it?!” She thought frighteningly. “What if it might make her cry?! Or worse... yell at me and not wanting to see me never ever forever never!?” Pinkie could already see how badly things might go if she didn't do this right!

I really need some help! But who I should ask?” She thought. At first she thought about Twilight. She was really smart and no doubt had some books that might give her good tips, but then she might turn this into a boring research thing. And that might not work so well for Fluttershy...

Then there was Rarity. But she might have something way too romantic and too fancy that Pinkie wouldn’t like to do.

Rainbow Dash would just tell to pucker up and kiss her. And going forward like that wouldn't be so nice for poor Fluttershy...

Applejack would probably just have no idea just like her.

But who is going to help me then!?” Pinkie almost wailed inwardly. Wasn't there anypony that she knew who could tell her what to do!? “Wait!” Pinkie suddenly thought. “OF COURSE!” she then suddenly jumped. It was great idea! “I can ask them!” she thought cheerfully. And then suddenly, without any warning, Pinkie darted in the opposite direction she was originally walking.



Soon, Pinkie Pie had reached her destination: Sugar Cube Corner. “MR. AND MRS. CAKE!” Pinkie cried out as she crashed inside the shop. “I NEED YOUR HELP!”

The two earth ponies, including the few customers they had for a moment, looked at Pinkie Pie with large shocked eyes. Pinkie's antics should already be familiar to all of them, but still there were just too many moments where Pinkie was able to surprise them still.

“Uuuuh...” was all both Cakes were able to say at the moment as they exchanged looks between each others. They had expected not see Pinkie this early, and like this. “Honey...” Mrs. Cake asked her husband after a moment of silence. “Would you take care of this? I'll join you quickly as I can.”

“Sure thing sugar bun...” Mr. Cake replied. Then pointing at the kitchen door for Pinkie, telling her to go there, to which Pinkie immediately complied and darted to the kitchen. While feeling even more nervous than before.

“So what is this problem of yours Pinkie?” Mr. Cake asked, when he closed the door and hoping that this was really something important. Not that Pinkie had some important matters, but there had been rather many times where the matters have been not so important.

Pinkie took deep breath before starting to talk. “I'mliketotallyhavingacrushonsomeponysoIdon'tknowwhattoandsoIwaswonderingifyoucouldhelpmeout?!” Mr. Cake just stared at Pinkie, completely confused by what she had said.

“Uuuh... Pinkie can you say it again, and maybe bit more slowly...” he asked.

“Sorry Mr. Cake.” Pinkie apologized. “It's really, really hard to tell when there is a swarm of Parasprites in my stomach,” she explained. That got Mr. Cakes attention. Pinkie Pie was never really nervous, or at least this nervous, when she wanted to tell them something. “Hmmm... perhaps I should play the Parasprite polka so I could get them out of my tummy and then-”

“Pinkie...” Mr. Cake warned Pinkie that she was turning away from the topic.

“Oh... sorry.” Pinkie gave Mr. Cake a sheepish grin. “W-well, ya see Mr. Cake...” Pinkie then started slowly.

“Yes?”

“I-I-I.. have a...” Pinkie continued, but as she was nearing that word, she found herself stuttering.

“Yees?”

“...A crush on somepony...” Pinkie finally said it! Although she said it so quietly that Mr. Cake had a hard time to hearing it.

“Sorry Pinkie Pie, but would you repeat that?” He asked. It couldn't have been what he thought he heard. But before Pinkie tried to say it again, the kitchens door opened and Mrs. Cake walked in. “Well, I'm done now,” she said. “So, what Pinkie had to say?” She asked her husband.

“She was about to,” Mr. Cake explained. “But she is having some problem of expressing herself.” Mrs. Cake looked her husband with puzzled look at the way he pronounced the word 'problem'. Both Cakes then turned to Pinkie, waiting for her to speak.

But it was much easier said than done. Now that Mrs. Cake was here, it was even harder to say. “Come on Pinkie Pie!” She thought while twisting her face as she tried to explain herself. “Why must this be so super-duper-really hard!?

While still waiting and Pinkie to talk, the Cakes couldn’t help but notice the facial expressions Pinkie threw at them. They both had seen these kinds of expressions before, especially in their own lives, but it just almost seemed not possible for Pinkie to feel something like that.

Not that they didn't want to sound rude or anything, neither of them had imagined that Pinkie would actually be emotionally interested into someone. But they could be wrong too...

“IHAVECRUSHONSOMEPONY!” Pinkie then exclaimed, fast. Although this time Mr. Cake could understand her, and so did Mrs. Cake. And it was just shocking. That the Pinkie Pie, they had grew and worked with, had a crush on somepony!

“Aaaand who that might be?” Mrs. Cake asked carefully, trying not to stress Pinkie.

Once again, Pinkie was struggling with her words although it shouldn't be so hard! They were only Mr. and Mrs. Cake! They were like a second family to her, she was sure they would understand. “I... I...” she stuttered, starting sound more like the mare she was having a crush on. “...Have a crush on Fluttershy...” she muttered.

“Sorry Pinkie, but care to repeat that?” Mrs. Cake asked carefully. She was sure that she heard Pinkie mentioning Fluttershy...

“I HAVE A CRUSH ON FLUTTERSHY!” Pinkie finally cried out. “AND I DON'T KNOW HOW TO TELL HER THAT!!!” Pinkie then started panting loudly after she had revealed her deep secret, leaving the two Cakes looking at her in shock and confusion.

And they stayed that way, looking at Pinkie Pie. Who unfortunately took the silenced shock in a negative way. “PLEASEDON'TBEMADATME!IPROMISEIWON'TSAYANYTHINGABOUTTHISAND-” Pinkie was quickly silenced by Mrs. Cake's hoof.

“No need to get all distressed Pinkie,” Mrs. Cake said in comforting, but still just slightly raised voice so Pinkie would actually listen to her. “And sorry for not reacting immediately,” she then apologized. “We were just bit surprised that... well, you, out of anypony, is actually have a crush on somepony else.”

“Huh?” Pinkie raised an eyebrow, her mood changing like she didn't have the small breakdown couple moments ago. “Is it that weird?” She then asked.

“No, I mean that, neither of us really thought you would start considering a... relationship.” Mrs. Cake continued explaining.

“Ooooooh.” Pinkie replied in realization. “So, does this mean that are you going to help me?” She then asked.

“Well of course we will!” Mrs. Cake exclaimed happily. “Can't let you go and maybe ruin your first date with Fluttershy,” she smiled. “She is such a nice filly.”

“You got that right dear.” Mr. Cake chuckled. “So Pinkie, have you even thought about how to bring this up with Fluttershy?” he asked.

“Well, I kind of a thought about throwing a party...” Pinkie started, but cut herself off when noticing the looks the Cakes gave her. “...but then I quickly realized that: Wait? Fluttershy doesn't like big parties with so many ponies. And wouldn't certainly like I go all crazy-telling-every single-pony-in-Ponyville-that-I-love-you-Fluttershy-crazy.” She explained. “And then I started thinking that there might another way than just good old fashioned party,” she said in with a serious tone, or at least tried. “Is there some other way than party?” Pinkie then innocently asked. The two Cakes couldn't help but chuckle at Pinkie.

“Well,” Mr. Cake then started, his voice still holding slightly laughter in it.”There is one way certainly.” he then turned to his wife, silently asking her to continue.

“A date.” Mrs. Cake finished.

“A date?” Pinkie asked puzzled.

“Yes, a date.” Mrs. Cake repeated. “Take her to someplace nice, have a nice little dinner, or make your own. But most importantly: it must be private.” Mrs. Cake finished.

“And that means no other pony around with you. Just you and her.” Mr. Cake then added.

“But what's that part about take her to someplace nice?” Pinkie then questioned. “Isn't that bit like taking to place with everypony around us? How is that private?”

“Uuuh...” both Cakes replied. This was going to take a while...



After what felt like almost forever with the Cakes, Pinkie was finally able to leave Sugar Cube Corner and was now heading towards Fluttershy's place with a good idea. “I'm going to give her a surprise party! Too bad it can't be her birthday party as it's so far away but still!” She thought excitedly. “And it will be SOOOO great!” She was now nearing Fluttershy's cottage. But as she was nearing the door, it suddenly opened and Fluttershy stepped outside.

“Hey Fluttershy! Fluttershy!” Pinkie called. Trying to get the pegasi's attention, which she almost immediately did when she had started calling, jumping and waving her hooves like crazy.

“Oh, hey Pinkie.” Fluttershy greeted her with her meek voice. “What are you doing here?” She then asked.

“Weeeeeell...” Pinkie started. “I was hoping to see you, because you see I have something really, really, really-”

“Well that's good Pinkie.”

Did... did Fluttershy just...” Pinkie thought with both confused and almost scared. “INTERRUPTE ME?!

“Are you OK?” Fluttershy then asked, noticing the big shocked eyed Pinkie now wore. “W- was it something I said?” Fluttershy asked, her voice getting slightly lower, and now Pinkie started to feel even more distressed. “Oh no! This is not a good start!

“Oh don't worry about that.” Pinkie gave somewhat weak chuckle to Fluttershy, trying to make her see that it was alright. “Soooo... what were you going to say?” She then decided to ask. Better just get it over with what Fluttershy had to say so she could get back to her plan.

“Oh, well, I was going to ask you if you would like to go for a picnic?” Pinkie wasn't sure what to think. On one hoof, this was the greatest bestest time to tell Fluttershy about her feelings. But then that would mean she had to go against what the Cakes had instructed her. And she also liked the idea.

“Of course I would love to come!” Pinkie smiled. And she was going to say something more, but Fluttershy beat her to it.

“And our friends will be there also of course,” Fluttershy smiled. Pinkie could feel her spirits flatten almost fast as her mane when she had believed that her friends didn't like her parties and didn't want to be her friends anymore. This almost felt even worse, almost as if Fluttershy had rejected her already.

“Pinkie? Are you alright?” Fluttershy asked discerningly as Pinkie was once again a little too quiet.

No! Can't be all sad now!” Pinkie started to think. “I bet I can still find a way to tell her about me...

“...So what you say?” Fluttershy finished.

“Huh?”

Fluttershy responded with a quiet giggle. “It seems that your mind is flowing all around more than usual, isn't it Pinkie?”

Pinkie couldn't for some reason make herself speak, instead a random rambles were the only things that escaped her mouth for a moment. But she quickly found her speaking ability. “Sooooo, what did you say earlier?” She then asked, hoping to change the topic.

“Oh yes,” Fluttershy started. “I was asking if you wanted to race with me too?” she asked. The only answer Fluttershy seemed to receive, were the sounds of crickets.

“SURE!” Pinkie then suddenly, and literally bursted, which even took Fluttershy just slightly by surprise. But that was just momentary lapse as Fluttershy was quickly back to her much more cheerful side.

“Oh, well, that's good.” she smiled. Then suddenly, without any warning, Fluttershy reached with her front hoof and nudged her shoulder. “Tag!” She then proclaimed, trying to sound as if she was saying it loudly, but she wasn't fooling anyone of course.

Fluttershy then darted off as fast as her wings could carry, leaving the dumbfounded Pinkie behind. But that didn't last long. “HEY!” She yelled back at Fluttershy. “THAT WASN'T FAIR FLUTTERS!” she then sprinted after Fluttershy.

Soon Pinkie was catching up with Fluttershy. But bit slower as it seems Fluttershy was faster than she had anticipated. “I bet with my cupcake savings that Dashie is behind this!” She thought as she tried to catch up with the yellow pegasus.

As the chase continued, Pinkie Pie was getting little bit irritated as every time she seemed to reached Fluttershy, she suddenly started flying faster. They repeated the act few more times, which only made Pinkie even more irritated. “When did Fluttershy become like... that?” Pinkie asked herself.

And soon Pinkie thought about something she probably shouldn’t have, but at this point she hadn't really cared as she just wanted this little game of tag to end. She didn't like being the tagger, she would rather just run away, giggling as no pony would be able to capture her.

What happened next, became a bit blurry for Pinkie. But what she did remember, was her suddenly, almost soaring through the air, towards Fluttershy, who didn't seem to suspect anything. And before either of them knew, they were rolling on the ground. And then it all stopped and Pinkie's vision was obscured by pink and yellow.

For a moment, Pinkie didn't know what had just happened or what was happening right now. But her senses quickly got back when the colors started shaking and she heard strange noises beneath her. She then quickly realized what had happened and on what, or rather who, she was laying on! And now she was sobbing.

Oh no! Fluttershy!” Pinkie thought distressingly. “Oh nonononnono! This all bad! I just jumped on Fluttershy and now I've gone and hurt her!” Pinkie could feel a large lump rising in her throat. “S... sorry... I'm so, really, so sorry Fluttershy!” Pinkie cried. “I... I don't know what I was thinking...” Pinkie could now feel herself starting sobbing. “I just got like, really, really frust-”

But Pinkie stopped her rambling, or rather was forced to end it as Fluttershy had pressed her lips against Pinkie's. Everything seemed to explode around Pinkie, her trail of thought completely halted for a while.

“Uhuhuh...” Fluttershy laughed weakly. “Surprise?”

Author's Notes:

Sorry if this had some OOC, this first time when I write a fic with Pinkie fully in it. I hope you were still able to enjoy this story :)
AND DON'T FORGET TO COMMENT!

And thanks for modernwater and VaporingRat for proof-reading!

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