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Chapter 13: Story recommendation: Biblical Monsters
Previous Chapter Next ChapterBiblical Monsters by Horse Voice. Dark, sad, tragic, compassionate, and so very well-written. It is sad, but not a dreadful so-far-pointless nightmare-inducing sad like the first chapter of “The Heart Thief”, which I regret reading. I left a comment on the story giving my opinion, which you probably should not read because it reveals my evil nature.
Adams did not answer. He was looking at a shiny spot on the table. I wondered what he was thinking about. Would he have an answer?
I realized then that the spot had not been there a moment ago. I saw dust particles move through an angled shaft of space that stretched from the table to the window, and realized that spot was where the sun reflected off the table's finish.
I looked out the window. In the sky above, there was a gap in the slate, through which I saw a shade of blue that had not appeared above Cook Point in almost a month. It was tiny, but it would grow.
The year's halcyon days had come.
Out of context, this sounds slow, even boring. Within the story, it’s a silent scream. This is the turning point where our protagonist realizes he’s doomed, that there is no happy ending to this story, that someone in the house is a monster and maybe it’s him. This is how to write.
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