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Stand for Equestria: Origin of Harmony (Comment Driven Story)

by Greatness942

Chapter 9: IX: Discordant

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Near Unanimous Comment Section: No to Discord, gather supplies and scout out the Mane Six.

Despite the huge honor bestowed upon you with even this simple request, you always have been a bit of a realist. Unpopular form of thinking back home in Ponyville, of course, but that's how you've seen the world. And the reality is, fundamentals or otherwise, you're still untrained and basically a novice. Luna was rusty and going easy on you; she probably agreed beforehand in a whisper because you'd clean out the rust in her Stand's joints. If an...inky black abyss has joints, anyway. Meanwhile, you'd be going toe-to-toe with a Chaos God that has just been said to be more active, and could potentially have a Stand of his own with whatever power that can only be imagined until you're injured or dead from it.

You are not ready, and you say as such. "Your Highnesses, with all due respect," you humbly respond. "I'm afraid that...well...Discord is way too damn powerful. I'm not ready." To your fortunate relief, Celestia simply smiles down at you.

In a calm, level tone, she responds "Shooting Star, I only asked because I knew that if I tried to stop you, it would be removing your agency." She leans down look into your eyes, her smile never fading even as her eyes flick upward, settling right on where she saw Rainbow Dash leaving from. There was something behind that gaze, burning like the sun even if her smile never faltered. "Your free will is the essence of your power, and I must ask that you never forget that," she reassures. "In that case, I ask that you watch over my student, and make sure all goes well."

You nod and walk past her to begin picking up your mail, but then a thought hits you.

Sunny Milk: Also Shooting Star should ask if there's any other abilities he could learn that aren't related to Stands?

"Wait..," you begin, both Princesses following your train of thought as you walked. "Are they any powers besides Stands? Or anything not related, anyway?"

"As much as we'd love to answer that, time is of the essence and we must make haste," Luna tells you, standing tall. "Right, thy sister?"

Celestia's smile turns into a smirk as she begins by saying "Oh, well, there is that solar magic that handles certain problems we've had long ago..." She shrugs and gestures to Luna as she then says "But my sister is correct. We must act swiftly to contain Discord until the Elements can be recovered safely. Here is where we part ways. Until we meet again."

You bow to the Princesses, who bow back in respect to a fellow Stand user, the keeper of a long secret. You all then turn around to continue your own objectives, ready to do whatever is necessary to restore order to Equestria by any means necessary.

BrownDog77: For prep, definitely get some bandages and other medical supplies since you have a feeling that being stabbed and spitting up blood is going to be much more common than you'd like. And you've learned in the fight with Luna that your strength is in misdirection. Try to gather things like party poppers, decks of cards, firecrackers, and other distracting things that can be used in a fight. And, since you've realized you can fold someone in with you, maybe a knife and a lighter to deal close quarter's damage.

Arcticstorm: If we choose not to directly follow Celestia and Luna we should at least help them out by gathering supplies or just scouting out the locations of the Main six/Discord/Elements of Harmony.

The general consensus in your mind before leaving Canterlot and chasing after the six mares making p the Elements of Harmony is to grab supplies. You walk back across Canterlot proper to a general store, noting the horrors a world of chaos has truly presented to you. Different non-pony animals, from ducks to cats, are floating out of control, and the sky is beginning to turn an odd shade of purple. The ground below is turning pastel, the rooftops of buildings are beginning to twist into a non-euclidean space, bending beyond the mind's eye. You try your best to shake off the laughing from all directions as you duck into the general store.

"End of the World Sale, 100% Off?" you question as you read the placard on the counter out loud. Some extra investigation shows that the poor soul running the place is cowering behind the counter, clearly not finding his chances good amongst the oddities. You sigh and begin to grab supplies. A medkit, some gauze, extra bandages, antibacterial cream, a knife, a lighter, and different party supplies including playing cards, party poppers, and firecrackers. You put this all into a freebie saddle bag and bring it to the counter. The cashier just rings a bell on the counter and gestures for you to leave ASAP, so you politely say "Thanks," and walk off with your new equipment. You are not two steps out of there by the time you hear a scream for help.

BrownDog77: Also, we need a Speedwagon.
We need a loyal, tough, rich non-stand user ally that can help us with technological advances, money, and moral support. Maybe it's a canon rich character like Filthy Rich or Fancy Pants, or an OC, it doesn't even have to be a pony. Maybe it's someone Shooting Star rescues.

You turn around to see a mare being attacked and bludgeoned by, of all things, floating furniture that sounds like it's laughing at her. You don't hesitate to run up, summoning New Divide quickly and unleashing a quick barrage of punches. There isn't much of a battle cry this time, sadly, instead just being the sound of your grunting as you demolish the chairs, tables, and, of all things, a shelf. When you're done, the area is cleared out, the mare visible fully. She is a unicorn, and has a green coat with a dark green mane with a blue streak through it, and what appears to be a monocle and top-hat, the latter of which is adorned with some gears. She stands up, wobbling about just as you hear a noise behind you, you turn around just in time to see a shelf, only for a table leg to be thrown from behind you into it.

You glance back to see the mare using her horn to hoist several more wooden pieces up, before flinging them all into the shelf, "killing" it proper. "...Thanks!" she huffs out, nodding her head to you. She has a slight accent to her voice, you notice. "There was so many of them I couldn't fight back. How'd you punch them all without touchin' 'em, though?"

You aren't sure how to explain Stands to this woman amidst the madness, so you simply respond with "I'll tell you when things aren't, er, insane." She seems to accept this, shrugging as if to say "makes sense", as you then say "My name's Shooting Star. And you are?"

She smiles brightly and uses her horn to doff her hat to you. "Canny Clockwork at your service!" she announces, replacing the hat on her head. "My friends call me just Canny, though. Or Clockie. Or-well, after saving my flank just now, you can call me whatever suits ya." She smiles brightly and looks back at the building she's next to, said smile dropping fast. "Aw...my workshop's busted to Tartarus and back. Damn it!' she says, kicking her hoof in irritation.

You look at said building as well. Windows busted, holes in the walls, some kind of weird plant growth overgrowing over the place. You have to concur: busted. "Uh, Canny," you ask, deciding to just go with that for now. "What is it you worked on, exactly?"

She turns back around, her eyes showing pride even if her frown showed disdain. "I'm glad you asked!" she states, raising a hoof up in a gesture of power. "I am an inventor and researcher, using my wealth and intellect to help build Equestria for the future. Why, with my current progress, we can reach a technological revolution within twenty years!" After her boast, she sighs and looks back to her workshop, losing the pride in her eyes like light dimming from a sunset. "Or, the progress I had. Gonna have to recover what I can and restart from there after this is all done."

You can understand the point she is making, and you let your empathy speak for you. "Well, you can't stay here while all this is going wrong," you tell her. "Come back to Ponyville with me, at least until this whole thing wraps up. It's bound to be less destructive than this." You hope it'll get her out of harm's way at the very least.

Luckily, she seems to take this heart, nodding along to it. "Yeah, sure," she tells you. "Can't let you get swarmed going it alone, and if I stay here, I'm gonna get knackered. We can talk more on the train!" As she declares this, she follows your lead as you begin trotting first. "You seem like a cool stallion. For being a weird, psychic pegasus, anyway."

"Coolest kind there is," you tell her, smirking to yourself.

She retaliates quickly by replying "And the rarest, it'd seem." The two of you chuckle. Seems you've made a friend through all this.


As you pull into Ponyville on a floating train, apparently not having thought about that part before deciding that using New Divide was a bit much at once, you appreciate having someone around to talk to. While there wasn't as much conversation between you and Canny as you would've liked, you did learn a bit more about her: born in Trottingham (explaining the accent), she was born into a rich family, inherited the bulk of the money, and moved to Canterlot later on. Again, not as much as you would've liked, but you'll have plenty of time to spend with your new friend after this wraps up. The two of you step off the train, Canny taking notes on how the train hovers along with estimations on it's weight, as you look to Golden Oaks Library.

Ze1a7in and Arcticstorm: THE MAIL!

Oh! Right, you remember the mail bucket and strap it back to your body, making a gesture for Canny to follow before she gets lost on the equations necessary for her Next Big Thing. You start tossing the (luckily chaos-free) mail out to different houses. Some bills for Vinyl and Octavia, a letter from Bon-Bon to her friend Lyra (now stained with some of Luna's blood. You hope that doesn't make it more of a collector's item), and a package that you are unaware of the contents of for "Time Turner", of whom you swear keeps slipping up and calling himself The Doctor, but that's not really your business on people hiding themselves. "A mail run?" Canny asks, raising an eyebrow. "Wee," she snarks, before suddenly seeming a bit more interested in the whole thing by asking "This your normal job?"

"Nah, I'm usually on the weather team," you reply, "but a friend of mine named Muffin was sick today, so she asked me to help out with the workload. She's on mail duty, so..,"

"Gathered that," she says, looking back to Time Turner's place. "Seems like a nice, easy-going gig, I'll say...so...think the pony that lives there has got anything exciting happening?"

"How about we focus on that after things calm down?" you offer, looking back to her. She seems to shrug and accept it, gesturing for you to keep leading the way.

Ze1a7in: And if(read: when) we see the Mane 6 in Ponyville, maybe just before Twilight becomes discorded, we try to assist Twilight in undoing whatever Discord did to them.

When you arrive back to Golden Oaks Library, you luckily manage to find most of the ponies you're looking for, save for Rainbow Dash. All of them grey and colorless. You arrive just in time to see Discord floating right there by a giant hole, and you can hear taunting and arguing. Finally, you see all of them turn their separate ways, and you hear Twilight's voice say "With friends like you...who needs...enemies?"

Discord laughs and fist-pumps before making to snap his fingers. Before he does, though, he sees you and Canny, and his face turns more neutral. He narrows his eyes before snapping his fingers anyway, and you watch as Ponyville descends into madness. The ground turns to what looks like quilts as buildings begin floating up. And despite this, Twilight turns to walk back in, not noticing or caring as she throws a crown off her head. A golden crown with a purple jewel, which you can only guess to be an Element of Harmony. The other Elements are on the ground with it. "Oh, crap," Canny says right next to you.

Out of sheer irritation, you yell out "Can today get any worse?!" while shaking one of your hooves.

Down with Chrysalis: If Discord is going to be more proactive with defeating them, he might send a monster or hell maybe a Stand user of his own creation after them to finish the job.

You pretty much immediately regret saying so as you hear Discord's deceptively smooth voice speak behind you, saying "Why, of course it can, my dear boy!" You and Canny turn around to see the draconequus floating behind the both of you. "And in fact, it will," he finishes, narrowing his eyes again with a frown before snapping his fingers and vanishing. You and Canny stand there for a second, before suddenly your own thoughts turn against you.

"Why should someone like YOU have all the power?!"

"A stick-in-the-mud realist who goes too far and never thinks."

"You recruited Clockwork into a war she couldn't fight, and for what? Loneliness? A Hero's Bravery? You're full of shit and everyone knows it!"

Your neurosis begin punching you and beating you, looking at Canny through wet eyes only to see her blurry image frenzied, rambling aloud "It needs to be perfect, it needs to be successful-work! The world can't be like this, it needs to work! I need it to work! I need it to do something right!"

And then it stops, the two of you calming down as you both breathe heavily from the effort the panic forced on you. It was as if your existing anxieties and neurosis suddenly amplified, crushing you under the weight of your own brain. Canny vocalizes both of your confusions' by asking "What was that all abou..." When she trails off, you look to her to see her looking through the town with wide eyes. Following her gaze reveals a Stallion walking towards the both of you. He stumbles and steps as though not in control of his hooves, speckles of red coating his grey coat as silver eyes stare forward without stopping it's gaze anywhere. There are shackles around his forehooves, and his black mane is splayed out in different directions. And right by him is unmistakably his Stand, floating by him in a white straightjacket with it's eyes and muzzle stitched together. It's hooves are green while the rest of it's "bare skin" is a cold blue.

The man chuckles before twitching his eye while looking at you, asking "in the way?" Before you can answer, he responds, "I guess you need to have your mind scream some more! CHAOS LIVES IN EVERYTHING!" The Stand poses in mid-air, glaring at you and Canny without it's proper vision as what you can only guess to be an unfortunate soul recruited by Discord cackles.

What Will Shooting Star (and Canny Clockwork) Do?
Stand for Equestria, Part 1: Origin of Harmony

Author's Notes:

Musical Reference: The Stand of your enemy (who I'll just call "The Patient" for now) is called Chaos Lives in Everything, and the musical reference is to the song of the same name by the band Korn.

So...this one's long overdue, and I'm sorry for that. Writer's block hit me hard lately. I'm not sure if that's an excuse or not, but I do apologize.

So, yes, another fight. This is a JoJo fic and the comments have spoken (well, one did) so here we are. Once again, leave some Spots in the comments section. Once again, it's up to both my discretion and the comments I'm given on who wins the fight. But this time, while I would like for both Shooting Star and Canny Clockwork to survive, it's really up to you how The Patient fairs.

And our question of the chapter is:
Who is your favorite JoBro from the source material?

Now, Canny may not necessarily be the JoBro (though since she is supposed to be like Part 1 Speedwagon, she might be), but it still spurred on the question. Me personally, I'm rather torn between Speedwagon himself, Okuyasu, Bruno, and Gyro. Not that the rest are bad (Ermes, Yasuho, Caesar, and Kakyoin all tie for runner up), but those four excel at being likable, well-written characters with plenty of charm and some nice abilities. They reach Number 1 on my ranking.

Anywho, I hope the wait was worth it and you enjoyed the chapter. I can't wait to see what you all comment for next time. :D

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