Twilily Saga: Endless Time, Or Forever End.
Chapter 10: Chapter 9: Union and Understanding (Revised) (Clop)
Previous Chapter Next ChapterHours later Rarity slowly woke back up. She found herself on a soft bed. She looked around “Spike!” she yelled as she tried to find him. But she felt an incredible pain all over her body. Rarity looked to see her whole body covered in bandages.
Then a diamond dog walked into the room she was in. “Calm down mare, he’s right beside you,” said the diamond dog. Rarity looked to her left and saw Spike laying on a separate bed across from her. He had a large amount of bandages wrapped around his chest.
Rarity demanded to know what had happened. The diamond dog explained that they had found her and Spike after he had already done ‘it’. “Done what?” Rarity demanded an answer. The Diamond dog hesitated and then spoke.
“He wanted to save you, but there was so much blood, that I suspected that it was the only thing he could see doing.”
“What do you mean?” said Rarity, trembling.
“Now listen, what he did may seem cruel, but he had to stop the bleeding somehow.”
“WHAT DID SPIKE DO?!?!” Rarity yelled in anger.
“He…. he…..seared your wounds shut.”
“What?” said Rarity, as she tried to catch her breath but fainted.
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Back at the base, Night Fright hunted for Blueblood. “Hmm, looks like I succeeded. But I was unable to keep the beast contained.”
Suddenly a dark pulse appeared as out of it walked a young Princess Dead Star. “Night Fright where is the great and powerful Trixie’s betrothed?”
“He’s over here Princess Dead Star.”
Princess Dead Star walked over and looked at Blueblood. “The great and powerful Trixie told you this was a bad idea to listen to Night Fright, but would you listen to Trixie, no.” Then she turned back to Night Fright. “Can you fix him?”
“Of course, that shouldn’t be too hard.”
“Good, because the great and powerful Trixie wants you to make him more…..obedient,” said Princess Dead Star with a twisted grin.
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Rarity woke back up. It was a month later and nighttime. Her burns had healed enough for her bandages to be removed as she looked at a nearby mirror. She slowly removed them and saw the scars and burns all over her face and body.
Then Rarity turned to see that she had been woken up by Spike as he spoke in his sleep. She looked at herself with disgust. She looked at him with anger. ‘How could he do this to me?’ she thought as she got up. Rarity felt like she was wrong about him the whole time. She moved closer, summoning a crystal blade. ‘How could he destroyed me?’ She was now standing right beside his bed. ‘He might as well have defiled me!’ All these thoughts were racing through her head, faster and faster as she lifted the blade. ‘He did this to me, I loved him, and he betrayed me.’
Rarity was ready to strike, when she finally heard it. His words. “Rarity please forgive me. I'm sorry, I couldn't lose you.” That’s when Rarity felt it. An unusual ache in her heart. She placed her hand on her heart only to be completely shocked at what she felt.
Two separate heartbeats.
“Rarity I can’t lose you. There is no point to life without you."
That’s when she realized what he did. Spike had given Rarity a piece of himself to ensure that he would never lose her. She had a piece of his heart. Their hearts were one. She could feel everything he felt.
At that moment, she dropped her blade on the ground and fell onto Spike’s chest as she weeped new tears. ‘How could I be so blind!’ her thoughts yelled at her. ‘He loves me, he loves me,’ She pushed her head closer into his chest as she weeped.
Suddenly Rarity heard Spike scream in terror, as nightmares attacked him. “No! Rarity could never forgive me. I’m a monster, I’m a monster!”
Upon hearing those words, Rarity instinctively climbed on top of the bed. She yelled, “Spike you are no monster. You are Spike the Dragon. I love you, and I forgive you!” Spike's eyes shot open.
“You forgive me?” he asked.
“Yes I forgive you,” said Rarity. It was at that moment that Rarity had found herself lying right above Spike’s body, with her arms and legs holding her up. But no longer did she care that he was so close to her. Her dual heart beats began to move quickly.
“But how could you-- ” Spike was silence by Rarity as she kissed him. Their first was sweet, tender and incredible, yet short, as she pulled back “What?” is all he could get out.
“Spike I love you, and you love me, yes?” said Rarity, as their duel heartbeats moved faster and faster. Kissing him felt incredible to her. She felt like she wanted more.
“Of course I do--” again he was stopped by another kiss, this one even longer, as she pulled herself closer to him, their bodies’ now mere centimeters apart. Spike felt her pulling him closer, so he grabbed the bed as he realized what she was doing. Rarity realized herself what she was doing and stopped for a moment. Then she noticed that Spike was holding his arms down. He didn’t grab her, he didn’t touch her. Rarity had been doing all of it by herself.
“Oh, always such a gentledragon,” Rarity said, as she pulled him closer. Their bodies were now in complete contact. “I know you don’t want to seem vulgar Spike, but I want this.” She grabbed his arms and pulled them around her body, their dual heartbeats moving even faster.
Rarity went in for more kisses. These ones longer as Spike slowly gave in and began to push as much as Rarity was. His tongue began to push against her teeth softly, asking politely to be let in. Rarity tried her best to hold in a giggle at the fact that though they were now kissing, Spike was still being even so gentle about it. It made her want this even more. She opened her mouth and pushed her own tongue in as well. Their long kisses becoming more passionate with each second as they let each other’s tongues in and move back and forth in their mouths. Spike’s hands began to move across her back, his claws lightly massaging it.
This felt incredible to Rarity. She had wanted him to hold her closely and kiss her passionately. But he was now caressing her too. This was even better than she thought it’d be! Rarity began lightly moaning in between breaths from the enjoyment. Spike stopped upon hearing, thinking he had hurt her, but then she wrapped her legs around him and pulled back long enough to take a breather and said, “No Spike don’t stop. Keep going. I want to enjoy every moment of this. I want more Spike, I want more.” The two continued to kiss, their tongues rubbing their teeth and their gums as both their eyes rolled back while their tails wrapped around themselves. Rarity willingly letting Spike’s smooth claws explore every part of her. Almost every part of her as he tried his best not to drift too low.
Although as his hands began to move from her back to her front, his claws slowly noticed the burns he had given her. Tears started to form in his eyes. Rarity could feel that something wrong. So without hesitation, she took his hands and moved them to her breasts. His tears stop as he began to massage her rather large and surprising scar and burn free breast. Her moans began to slightly raise in volume at his movements. ‘What am I thinking? Oh, what am I thinking? Oh, please don’t stop Spike, Oh.’
Suddenly Rarity let out an “eep” as she felt something down below bump against her. She pulled herself away and sat up, catching her breath. Rarity let out heavy breaths as she slowly turned around long enough to see what had bumped her. Her eyes nearly shot out of her head and her jaw dropped upon seeing it. ‘Oh wow, I never thought a male’s member would be so big! He’s gigantic down there!’ She then looked at Spike, who was still massaging her breast. His eyes were on her, wondering why she had pulled back. She could feel his guilt. Spike had not planned that at all.
She then looked back one more time at the size of Spike’s member. ‘Oh no, what am I thinking?’ her mind argued with herself while not noticing her hands were now wandering down. ‘I’m enjoying the kisses, the caressing, and especially that scaly forked tongue. I…. I….’ suddenly her mind jolted upon finding her hands now below her. She was wet, severely wet.
Her hands moved on their own as she started to rub herself. ‘Oh, no, I’m masturbating right front of Spike...oh, I need to stop, but it feels so good!’ Her mind tried its best to argue, but her movements got faster. She couldn’t stop no matter how hard she tried. Spike stared in complete confusion at Rarity’s movements. Suddenly her rear began to rub against his member. He moaned softly continuing to massage her breast. His moan only caused Rarity to rub herself even harder. She began moaning aloud as she felt herself close to finishing.
Rarity then fell forward on to Spike’s chest as she felt her orgasm. She scream slightly at how incredible she felt. Her mind couldn’t argue anymore ‘That was...wow! I want more. I want to enjoy every part of Spike.’ Her mind was now slowly making sense, but there was an obvious problem now - it was her first time. Would she enjoy it as well? Or would she hate it?
‘Only one way to find out.’ Was her final thought on the matter. Rarity sat up, then noticed that Spike had stopped massaging her. She looked at him. Spike’s face was down, filled with worry. Rarity put her hand on his cheek. He looked up at her most beautiful smile.
“Spike,” she said softly. “I want to enjoy something with you, so please don’t hesitate with this next part. Will you….. Will you…... Spike, will you have sex with me?”
Spike’s jaw dropped but he slowly nodded a yes and Rarity moved to the next step. She took a deep breath and lifted her hips, slowly lowering herself on to him, ever so slowly letting his huge member enter her. She gasped for air as she felt ecstasy filling her mind. Spike let out his own gasps for air as he felt how tight she was. Rarity let it enter more into her until she could move it in no deeper. She began to feel a slight pain as he started to hit a wall. She figured it as far it would be pushed. From there she began to move her hips up and down.
Spike let out more soft moans as Rarity began to move faster. Rarity’s moans rose in volume once more as the pain and tightness slowly went away. ‘Oh wow, I, oh, can’t believe, oh, I’m doing this.’ “But, oh, wow this feels, oh, so good!” she let out as her movement continued.
Suddenly she felt Spike legs jolt as his member suddenly went way deep inside her as his member fully punctured complete past the wall. “Ah, oh!” she moaned aloud as her body was now frozen. She could no longer move her hips. Spike’s hands started to move down Rarity’s body. He reached her hips and Rarity spoke, “Spike please keep it going. I can’t move anymore, yet I don’t want it to stop.”
Spike then grabbed her rear. Rarity slightly let a heavily aroused scream upon feel his claws upon her cutie mark. Moans began to follow as Spike had taken over the movement. This was incredible. The pain was gone and she was now enjoying every part, but it wasn't just the sex she was enjoying the most. It was the fact that she was having such a moment with Spike, his hands gently moving her up and down. And it was made even better by how gentle and smooth he moved her. She had worried that he would become some sex crazy male. He was never the least bit vulgar about it.
“Oh, Spike, thrust me softly,” she moaned. Hearing he began to slowly thrust his own hips up and down. They continued even longer. “Spikey, oh, sit up, oh, and hold me.” Hearing for the first time the word the soon to be nickname for him, he sat up and wrapped his arms around. He continued his movement while sitting up. “Oh Spikey Wikey kiss me,” his smile growing bigger as the nickname got bigger. Hearing her words he eagerly locked lips with her.
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They continued having sex for several minutes, however, time did not matter. Whether it lasted minutes or hours, this was joyous for the both of them. Spike and Rarity fell down to the bed as she started to get back control of her body. “Oh, okay Spike let me, oh, have back, oh, control.”
Spike noticed her words as he slowed his thrusting, letting her take back control of the movement. He returned his hands to her back lightly massaging it with his claws while Rarity slowly continued to move her hips, letting herself grind against his member.
“Oh Rarity, wow!” Spike finally let out, after only letting out moans for so long. Rarity giggled with delight at the pleasure she was giving him as well as the pleasure he was giving her. Suddenly Spike pushed his face into her chest. Now his forked tongue was exploring her. Rarity lifted her head back and lifted her hand over his head motioning it to continue his assault on her body. His licks were right below the single scar where her new heart was and it filled her mind even more ecstasy. Her eyes rolled back as his tongue moved through her breast as she continued to grind herself on his member.
They continued for even longer. This was incredible and neither one wanted it to stop. But soon Spike began to feel something begin to rise within. An urge he had never felt before. His own hips began to thrust on their own. “Rarity I think, oh, something is happening.”
“Oh….Yes the most marvelous sex ever.” She let out, not even noticing the speed their sex slowly picking up for she was feeling the same incredible sensation from the end of her masturbation session returning.
“No, I mean something else.”
Rarity’s eyes shot open as she quickly realized what he meant. “Oh… you’re about… Oh…. to finish?”
“What do I do?”
Rarity lifted her head forward and met his lips. Giving him a quick peck and spoke with the biggest smile. “Finish inside me Spike,” Spike's mouth dropped, but Rarity went in for a longer kiss and pulled back. “Buck me Spike. Buck me as hard and as fast as you desire. I want all of it Spike. Don’t you dare pull it out, I’m almost finishing again, too.”
Upon hearing that, he wrapped one arm around her, pulling her as close to him as possible, and his bucking continued at an even greater speed as they slowly sat up for better position. Both their moans got louder. Spike then grabbed Rarity’s head with his free hand and pushed his lips onto her with incredible, breathtaking passion. His tongue quickly explored every part of her mouth while her tongue did the same. Both their minds went blank as they felt the end was near.
As her climax finally came, Rarity pulled back and screamed, “I LOVE YOU, SPIKE!!”
Spike felt his climax hit him as well. He heard her scream while he roared, “I LOVE YOU TOO, RARITY!!”
Rarity trembled with euphoria as she clung tightly on to her lover’s chest as she felt Spike trembling while his member continuously shot into her over and over until he was spent.
Afterwords the two fell back down on to the bed and stayed in their positions not moving the slightest. Their arms wrapped tightly around each other, not wanting this moment to end.
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A rather long hour passed after they finished before Rarity finally fell off of Spike’s member. She fell to the right side of her lover with his right arm still around her. Rarity snuggled close to her lover, as close as she could. “Hmm….that was truly marvelous Spike.”
“So you’re glad all that happen?” He questioned.
“Well, when we started kissing, I never once consider it would lead to sex.”
“Now that it’s over you're regretting it,” Spike said sadly.
“Oh no, no, no, I enjoyed it as much as you did. I asked you to take me and I don’t regret a single bit of it.”
“Really?”
“Yes really,” she said as she smiled and snuggled into her dragon more. Spike’s right claw moved through his lover’s mane, to which she purred intently. Sleep was slowly taking her. Spike could see it in her eyes as they slowly closed. Grabbing a blanket from nearby, he laid it over both of them.
Spike then looked to see the Fire Ruby, which now on a table beside them. He looked back at Rarity. “Good night my white and purple ruby,” he said as he turn to his side and wrapped both arms around her. He kissed her on the head to which she unconsciously rubbed her face into his chest. Rarity’s face was right above the scar Spike had gave himself, when he had tore out a piece of his heart. He looked at the scar knowing with time it would go away. But his lover’s burns wouldn’t. Burns that he caused, Spike pondered no more as he closed his eyes and let sleep finally take him.
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Months later, the two found themselves work together to lead the diamond dogs and becoming the Cave Rebels. And they led battles directly against the Empire. Spike and Rarity even manage to find Sweetie Belle alive.
But when the second Dark War came around, Spike and Rarity did not get involved. Do to Chrysalis being in it. Instead, they went on their honeymoon, for they had been secretly married.
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<Present Time>
“Of course then you asked me and Spike to join in the third Dark War,” said Rarity, as she finally completed her story.
Twilight just sat there, her face covered in dried tears. “Oh Rarity I'm sorry, I had no idea. Have you told anypony else this?”
“Well, the diamond dogs, Sweetie Belle and a few others know the truth about me. The other you and Flash also were included in the ones who knew, that how I knew you weren't her,” she answered, as she then looked at Twilight with a scowl. “But dear, I’m not the one you should be saying sorry to.” She got up. “You should be saying sorry to Spike.”
“Right, well I guess I will go head back to my cell until he wakes up, then tell him,” said Twilight as she got up, but Rarity waved for her to sit back down so she did.
“No just sit here. Spike be will up in a few minutes to get breakfast ready. You can tell him then,” Rarity said as she waved her hand over the crystals around the entrance. The crystals descended back into the ground. “Just don’t go wandering off.”
“Oh, so Spike cooks for you as well, in this timeline,” said Twilight, with a slight smile, as she was clearing her face.
“Actually we usually have our own personal chef do it. Do you know of a Gustav Le Grand?” asked Rarity as she put her mask back on.
“Of course! He is one of the best griffin chefs in Equestria,” answered Twilight.
“Well, we rescued him a few months back. Afterward, he became our personal chef. He cooks most of our meals, however, Spikey Wikey insists that he himself should still make breakfast every morning,” said Rarity, as she took her leave.
“Yeah, it seems in both timelines, he’s always determined to do something nice…. especially for you.”
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While Twilight sat there waiting for Spike to get up, Rarity went to down to the cell area. She walked up to one of the cells. There she saw that Discord was gone. “Oh, I see the draconequus already escaped.”
She turned to Rainbow Dash. “Hey, what did you do with Twilight?!?!” Rainbow Dash shouted in anger.
Rarity summoned a crystal seat out of the ground and sat down. “Rainbow Dash, how dare you speak with such anger. If you must know, I’m letting her live for now. She is upstairs, but while she is there, I want to know all the info on this Twilight.”
“Well, why should I tell you?” Rainbow Dash questioned.
“Because if you don’t dear,” Rarity slowly summoned some long crystal shards from the ground in Rainbow Dash's cell. “Well, you can figure out the rest.”
“What?” said Rainbow Dash.
“Oh come on dear, you barge into my base uninvited and you don’t expect me to do something?” said Rarity with a bright yet dark smile.
“Fine,” said Rainbow Dash.
“Good,” Rarity giggled.
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Twilight sat there waiting for Spike to show up, lost in her thoughts. ‘I need to apologize to Spike, I mean it was not my intention to scare him. All I wanted to know was who hatched him, but now I know it was this ‘Dark Master’ known as ‘Father’ and I actually have a few ideas on who it might be.’ She went through the list of details. ‘Hmm, let’s see...power over fear, shadowy appearances would mean Sombra and yet a connection to Princess Luna and an appearance that gives no clear species on whether this ‘Father’ is a unicorn, earth pony, or pegasus. These are things that are not what Princess Celestia had always described him as. Could it be Tirek? No, he has no connection to Luna either. Well then, it must be some unknown villain I have yet to face.’
Eventually, Spike walked into the room. “Oh you're still here,” said Spike, snapping Twilight back to reality. “I don’t have time to deal with you,” Spike said as he walked off.
“Wait,” said Twilight. “Rarity told me everything.” This stopped Spike. He took a moment and then kept walking. Twilight got up and went after him. “Wait! Spike, I need to talk to you.” Twilight chased after him. “I said wait!” she said as she grabbed his shoulder. But he knocked her hand away.
“Look I know she told you,” said Spike.
“What? You heard us talking?” Twilight was taken off guard by this.
“Yes and no,” said Spike, as he turned around. “Listen, me and Rarity share the same heart, we share the same feelings, we share everything,” he paused, then spoke more. “We share our sorrow, we share our pain and we share our shame.”
“All right then, so you’re not just together. Please, come sit down and tell me more,” said Twilight. He didn’t. “Look I’m sorry for bringing up the past. I know what you went through must have been painful.” She pulled him over to the couch. “But I want you to know I was never here to cause you pain. In my timeline you’re more than just my friend, you’re part of my family, my real family,” The two sat down. “So please, tell me what is wrong.”
“Listen, what I did has always filled me with shame,” said Spike. “And I know Rarity fears me because of that.”
“She fears you?” questioned Twilight. “Why would she fear you? She loves you.”
“Because I am selfish. I did that to her because I didn’t want to lose her,” said Spike as tears started to form in his eyes. “Because I wanted her by my side always. I love her and I can’t be without her,” he paused then continued. “So I burned her wounds so she would survive and I gave a piece of my heart so she wouldn't leave me.”
“What are you saying Spike?” asked Twilight.
“I’m saying what I did was selfish. Now she is eternally bound to me. She now ages at the same rate as me, and will live as long as I do,” said Spike. Twilight wondered how that could ever be a bad thing for Rarity. After all, she always wanted to stay young. But then Spike said, “And now, she will have to live looking the way she does for millennia.”
“I don’t get it, I always thought you saw past her looks,” said Twilight.
“Of course I will always see her as beautiful, but every time I see those burns, I am reminded of the destroyer I am. I destroyed her,” said Spike as he put his face in his claws. “I destroyed her.” Spike let his tears loose. “And she will always fear me.”
“Spike, how do you know this? I mean you may sense her fear, but that doesn't mean she is afraid of you. She’s just afraid of losing you.”
“But she can’t lose me. Her heart is eternally bound to mine. If I die, she will die soon after,” said Spike as he looked up at Twilight. Rage was in his eyes. “There is no other reason that she would be afraid.”
Twilight opened her wing and placed it on Spike’s shoulder. “Listen, Spike, I know for a fact that if your Rarity is anything like my timeline's Rarity, then she is afraid of quite a few things, especially dust and mud.” This made Spike giggle a little. “But there is one thing she is never afraid of and that’s you.”
Twilight decide to again tell her story, this time to Spike. The two sat there as Twilight talked about the crazy adventures that Twilight and her timeline’s Spike use to have. Soon Spike's sorrow was gone, replaced with a happy face, laughing from the adventures they had together and being the best of friends.
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Meanwhile, Rarity found herself laughing uncontrollably, “You’re laughing? You're laughing? I don’t get you Rarity. First you in tears and now you laughing? Why are you laughing?” demanded Rainbow Dash, annoyed.
“Seriously dear, I don’t know what has come over me,” said Rarity. “It has to be Spike. He's laughing. I haven’t gotten him to laugh this much since before the event.”
“Event? What event?” asked Rainbow Dash. Suddenly Rarity got up from her chair while continuing to laugh. “Hey wait, where are you going?” Rainbow Dash demanded.
“I have to go see what would be making my beloved Spikey Wikey, so happy,” said Rarity as she took her leave.
“Hey what about us down here?” said Rainbow Dash, even more annoyed. “You can’t just ignore us!” But it was too late, for Rarity was gone.
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Twilight was enjoying seeing this timeline’s version of Spike laughing and being happy. Soon Rarity walked up, “Twilight…. heh, heh, heh,” Rarity was trying her best to get an answer out. But she couldn’t stop laughing, “What, heh, heh, heh, did, heh, heh, you do to my husband?” Soon Rarity fell down on the floor beside Spike, laughing.
“Oh I’m sorry I didn’t realize that you would feel the laughter too,” said Twilight. “Still getting you both happy is better than you both sad.”
“It’s okay, Twilight,” said Rarity, as she rolled closer to Spike while still laughing. “Don’t worry, heh, heh, heh, I can calm him, heh, heh, heh, down,” as she pulled up her mask and pulled Spike in for a kiss him rather strongly and then stopped. “Better?”
“Better,” said Spike.
“I’m sorry you two, I just wanted Spike to be happy,” said Twilight. “What happen?”
“Well it’s like I said,” said Spike. “I and Rarity share each other's emotions,” as he began to kiss Rarity again. “It can sometimes be a weakness of ours. We can sense when each other is sad.” Spike paused as Rarity kissed him back and then continued. “When each other is happy.” Spike would have continued, but then he kissed Rarity even more.
“Oh, dear,” said Rarity, in between the kisses. “Twilight, you might want to give us a few minutes. It seems that in my effort to calm down my husband, I’ve gotten him too ‘excited’ and we tend to lose control when both of us feel this ‘excited’,” said Rarity, as she began to kiss Spike even harder.
“What do you mean?” Twilight clearly wasn’t getting the message until she saw Rarity’s hand move down to Spike’s low regions. This enough info for Twilight to get out of there as quickly as possible. She ran, and once she was past the entrance, Rarity’s crystal magic closed the opening, giving the two lovers some privacy.
Twilight just kept running, not looking where she was going. Her mind on other things, ‘Oh wow, that’s something I definitely don’t want see.’ Soon Twilight crashed into Gustav Le Grand. “Oh sorry!”
“Oh, by the look of you, you just nearly witnessed Lady Rarity and Sir Spike in one of their ‘moments’,” said Gustav Le Grand. “By the way, would you happen to Twilight Sparkle?”
“Yes,” said Twilight as she got up.
“There is someponies outside that wants to talk to you,” said Gustav as he took his leave.
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Twilight headed outside, not knowing what she would find. “Hello, is anypony out here?”
Suddenly they walked up. “Oh, good to see you got out, Twilight,” said a certain yellow pegasus stallion with a blue mane that walked up. He wore blue armor and had a yellow lightning bolt as his emblem. As well as a metal right hand for some reason.
“Flash? Flash Sentry?” said Twilight, her jaw dropping. “What are you doing here?”
“Well ‘SS’ contacted us,” said another voice as a figure walked up. This pony wore a long cloak concealing his head and body. Even his face was hard to make out. It was impossible to even tell if this was even a pony that approached her. “So you are other Twilight Sparkle,” he spoke. His voice sounding so old and yet so deep.
“And who are you?” asked Twilight.
“Oh, I’m sorry, Twilight,” said Flash. “This is my mentor, and the leader of the Dark Rebels, ‘F’.”
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Next Chapter: Chapter 10: The Dark Rebels Are Here Estimated time remaining: 4 Hours, 10 MinutesAuthor's Notes:
Hello everypony. This is the last of the revised chapters. Next week onward will be chapters only me and the Proofreader have seen.
So how this version of the chapter? I'm asking because the original was vastly different. For instants the clop scene was not in the original. In the original, it was more like implied, this was mainly because of two reasons. Reason one, I have never been a fan of clop scenes, reason two I had very little experience writing these scenes at the time.
Now that I know what am doing, it feels like i am forcing the scene just a little, and I don't know why. This is my second attempt at a clop scene and it still feels like I'm forcing it.
Oh well, this will last story I do with a clop scene in it for a while. The stories after this may not have a clop scene. I would rather go with implying, that much easier.