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Rage Reviews Tears Apart Fluttershy's Bad Fanfiction

by Palm Palette

Chapter 3: Fluttershy's Fanfiction (Edited)

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Fluttershy's Fanfiction (Edited)

Prologue:

Teal Deer was an amazing deer that everypony knew and loved. She had a dark past where her face was scarred but not to the point where it looked bad because that would be bad. She wore a lovely blue dress with built-in saddlebags that were also built-in and saddlebags. It was twenty percent cooler than the average dress because she'd made it herself. She could do that because she was a fashion designer too.

One day, the meanie pony Mane-iac captured all the orphans and threatened to shave them if her new tail tangler was not worn by all the ponies. That was bad because the orphans were too poor to buy clothes and would get cold if they were bald. The tail tangler was uncomfortable too.

“I will have my meanie ways and the Power Ponies will not stop me this time because they are bad!” said Mane-iac.

Chapter 1:

The Power Ponies would not let this happen so they rushed in to save the orphans but it was a trap. Mane-iac beat them because they were bad.

“How did this happen?” Masked Matter-horn asked. “It's like we didn't even get to fight.”

“Hey!” Fili-second tried to escape their inescapable cage. “This scene rushed by even faster than I do!”  She could not escape because their cage was escape-proof. It did not let her escape.

“I just can't get mad in front of orphans,” said Saddle Ranger. “I don't want to upset them.”

“We are doomed,” said Zapp. “Nopony can save us now.”

“Nopony can, but what about a deer?!” Teal Deer appeared and everypony was awed.

“Yay! It is Teal Deer! We are saved!” said all the orphans and Power Ponies who were in awe of Teal Deer.

“Not so fast!” said Mane-iac. “For I am ready for you too!” said Maine-iac, in a surprising twist of fate. “I have assault lick!” said Mane-iac.

Chapter 2:

“No! Not assault lick!” Teal Deer was frightened because that was her secret weakness.

“Bwa ha ha!” said Mane-iac who unleashed assault lick.

“Aaah!” Teal Deer was embarrassed because she was licked by assault lick and her hair was all mussed up and she could not go out in public like that. She had to hide so she jumped behind a box in the corner of the room.

“But now you are trapped!” said Mane-iac. “For the floor is wooden, and if you move, you could get splinters in your hooves!”

“No! Not splinters in my hooves!” said Teal Deer. “Whatever will I do!?”

Mistress Mare-velous and Radiance who were also in the inescapable cage hugged each other. “We can't believe it ends this way,” they said. “We love each other.”

Was all hope lost!?

Chapter 3:

“Now I am totally free to have my meanie ways!” said Mane-iac.

All the Power Ponies and orphans cried.

“There is only one way to stop me, and that is by pulling the lever on the other side of the room. With the Power Ponies trapped and Teal Deal trapped in a different way, there is nopony who can stop me!” said Mane-iac.

But wait! Humdrum was not caged or trapped in a different way! He walked over to pull the lever but fell asleep before he got there because he was tired.

“No! Not Humdrum too!” said Teal Deer. “You fiend!”

Chapter 4:

All of the citizens of Mare-tropolis lined up for tail tanglers because they did not want to see the orphans cry.

“My plan is working!” said Mane-iac. “I am undefeatable!”

“No! You will not get away with this!” said Teal Deer. “For I have escaped your trap!” It was true. Teal Deer was free.

“What!? How did you escape the wooden floor!?” asked Mane-iac.

“It is because I took off my dress! For you see, my saddlebags were secretly covering up my wings which I have because I am part flying deer.”

Everypony was shocked at this revelation. With her wings, Teal Deer could fly over the wooden floor and not get splinters in her hooves.

“But what about your messy hair? Why does it look good now?” asked Mane-iac.

“It is because I had a comb in my saddlebags!” said Teal Deer.

Everypony was shocked at this revelation. With her comb, Teal Deer could fix her hair and not be embarrassed in public.

“But you have not yet pulled the lever! Until you do that, I still win!” said Mane-iac.

But Teal Deer was ready for that too. Her antlers glowed and she pulled the lever with her magic deer powers. She could do that, because she was part magic deer too.

“Noo!” screamed Mane-iac.

The inescapable cage lifted off the Power Ponies, because that is what the lever did. “Yay, we are freed!”

The inescapable cage landed on Mane-iac, because that is what the lever did too. “No! I have been defeated!”

Epilogue:

Teal Deer was swamped by all the ponies and orphans who loved her. “We love you, Teal Deer!” they shouted with their love.

Teal Deal was embarrassed by their love. “I am sorry, I said. But I only have love for the Power Ponies.” It was true. Teal Deer's heart was big, but it was only big enough for the Power Ponies. That was her second biggest weakness.

“It is okay. We only have love for you too,” said the Power Ponies. Even Mistress Mare-velous and Radiance said that, because they decided that they loved Teal Deer more than they loved each other.

“But you cannot all love each other,” said Humdrum, who woke up. “You are all girls.”

“But that is where you are wrong!” said Teal Deer. “I can too love them, because I am also part male deer!”

It was true. Teal Deer was part male deer, and because of that she could love any doe or buck or mare or stallion that she wanted, even Humdrum.

“I am sorry. By being part male deer you have made my argument invalid and I have been made to look foolish. Can you forgive me and love me too?” Humdrum asked.

“I don't know. My heart is only big enough for the Power Ponies,” said Teal Deer.

“He's always been part of our team,” said Radiance.

“He might be a failure in every way but he is one of us,” said Zapp.

“Okay, I can love him too,” said Teal Deer.

And they all cheered and got married and adopted all the orphans and Mane-iac had to wear all of her tail tanglers at once.

The End

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