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The Life of a Wanted Changeling (Comment Driven Story)

by Down with Chrysalis

Chapter 1: [FIXED] The Setup

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It was a beginning of a new day in Equestria. The sun is shining, the birds are singing, and it's been a few days since the failed Changeling assault on the Royal Wedding. With their defeat at the hooves of Princess Cadence and Shining Armor's combined love, life seemed to be returning to normal in Equestria. As for the changelings, well they were all blasted off to the badlands outside of Equestria. All of them... except you. You have been stranded in a dark and evil looking forest (*cough* Everfree Forest *cough*) for a few days now with utterly no clue as to where you are or even how to get out.

You hear voices coming from your right so you quickly dash to a nearby bush using your elite stealth skills... By that I mean you trip and fall into a bush. You peer out of the bush to see two ponies, one is a purple unicorn with a star-like cutie mark, and the other is orange earth pony with apples for a cutie mark. Your memory is still a bit fuzzy after the failed invasion, but you swear you've seen them before, *ding* A light bulb suddenly appears over your head as you say

"Now I remember! Those two where the ones who kicked everylings-!"

You quickly clap your hooves over your mouth when you realize your outburst and begin to panic when you see them turn towards your hiding spot.

"This is bad, really really bad." You whisper to yourself, "OK I need a plan and fast, if those two find out I'm here then my goose is cooked!"

You began to look around your hiding spot in hope of finding something you can use to escape. Nope, nothing, not a stinking thing around you that you could use to help you.

"Guess I just have to use my quick thinking and massive assortment of skills to escape..." You say to yourself.

...

"I'm doomed." You say sadly before you begin to do what any reasonable person does in the face of impeding doom. You curl up into a fetal position and began to cry to your mommy.

"*sob* WHY DOES LADY LUCK HATE ME?! I DON'T WANT TO DIE!!! WAHHHH!!!"

You stop your crying when you see the ponies are only a couple feet away. You can’t hear exactly what they are saying, but you hear the purple unicorn mention “changelings”, "hunt", and “princess.” Your eyes widen in pure fear as it doesn't take a dictionary to figure out that their conversation will NOT be pleasant for you.

I need to get the buck outta here! But how? HOW?!

You began to freak out about your impending doom as dozens of different outcomes go though your mind. They range from waterboarding, to dismemberment, to tickling, and to smashing a cake in front of you until you just thought of the most disturbing one. This one is so ghastly that you yourself are ashamed to even be thinking it:

You. Tied to a chair. And forced to watch the most disgusting show in the history of Equestria. It's... oh god why that show. It's... MY LITTLE HUMAN!

That show is just... so... STUPID! Why the hay do grown stallions and mares watch that girly show?! I mean it's about six humans who discover the "magic" of freindsh*snap!*

"What was that?" You say to yourself. You realize that while you were complaining about *shiver* that show, the ponies had stopped talking and you don't even hear their footsteps anymore. Hoping that they left to go investigate another part of the forest, you looked up...

Only to see huge, purple eyes right in your face! Both you and the pony stare at each other for a few moments before you do the greatest thing any changeling will ever do if they are caught... you scream like a little filly right into the pony's face. This causes the pony to start screaming as well! Thinking fast, you quickly throw dirt into the pony's eyes... And by that I mean you accidentally kicked dirt into the pony's eyes when you stumbled back and tripped. She (now that she's closer, you can actually tell that she is most definitely a she) falls backwards and begins to rub her eyes in pain.

You didn't mean for that to happen, but before you can apologize and run, you notice that the orange pony from before is charging straight towards you with pure rage in her eyes,

"You varmint! When I get my hooves on you..."

Deciding that you didn't what to hear the rest of her threat you whirl around and gallop for your life. You gallop as fast as your hole-filled legs can which isn't much cause you know, holes in your legs and all. You somehow managed to dodge all the branches and rocks blocking your path which causes you to comment,

"Huh, maybe lady luck is finally on my side for once."

After running for a while, you briefly turn your head to see if the enraged pony is still after you.

"Yes!," you say to yourself in triumph as you don't see her. "Lady luck must really be on my si*Crash*Owwwwwww"

When you turned around to check and see if you were still being chased, you somehow managed to crash into a tree.

"Ughhh, stupid tree" you mumble to yourself angrily, "Why must my luck be so bad all the stinking time?"

Suddenly, you hear a scream coming from your left. It sounds like a mare and she may be in trouble, but is the risk of being caught by those ponies worth seeing why that mare is screaming? Or, should you stay were you are and hide so that you might live a little longer...

You Decided

Author's Notes:

Hello all you wonderful bronies and pegasisters out there, Down With Chrysalis here or DWC for short. Welcome to my very first story, and if you couldn't tell from the title its gonna be a you decide fic. I’m going to write the first scene in this story, and then you guys decide what happens next. Now a bit of a warning here is that if people actually like this, then you are probably going to have to until I get enough suggestions to work with.

I hope you folks out there like this idea, cause I'am really nervous about it. Anyway I would also appreciate it if you guys would also suggest a name for our changeling. It has to be a unisex name like Alex. If you guys can do that then it would be awesome.

Also I would like to give thanks to RazortheAwesome, the author of "Wake up. See This. What do?" and "Wake up. See this. What do? - Part 2: Raise the Flag." These two stories inspired me to write this fic in the first place, Razor also gave some great advice to help start this fic up. So if you hate and despise this story's existence, then go on over and read the two fics above that are true works of comment driven stories.

Oh, and before you go ahead and make suggestions, go to my profile . Their will be a blog explaining some stuff....ok alot of stuff. With that I fid (that's the way to spell it right?) you farewell, until next time (hopefully.)

Oh also (huh I say that alot huh) a proofreader would be great as well. javascript:smilie(':twilightsheepish:

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