No, this isn't a chapter, but a question to those of you that actually care. I have put some thought into it and figure that my writing skills have improved over the past few months and I think I can do better.

So, my question is this: Do you people think I should try and rewrite this story or leave it as is? Course all this will be passed through "inspection" before it even moved a muscle.
So, what to you guys think?