This is the first MLP:FiM fanfic story I ever wrote, and it shows.
It's pretty bad. It's awful. It's almost 1100 words of barely competent prose and doesn't deserve to be up on EqD.
Standards, you could say, have gone up. That can only be a good thing. I'm personally rather ashamed of the execution of this story, but it stands as an example of what not to do.
I'd say enjoy, but... naa. It's bad.