While it was right

A navy blue Stallion with black hair and a streak of navy blue, gets up from bed and goes to wash up and I look into my own red eyes in the mirror, after I yawns I splashes water on to my face then I go to look for food, looking for food I grab some cereal and poured it into a bowl. Once I cleaned up I heard a knock on the door, I opens up and I see a light brown earth stallion with long spikey yellow mane, "Hey Dylan" he said "hey Joska, you ready to go?" Joska showed the bags he had, I led him inside my house and he took a seat on the couch, "hey Joska you want something to eat" "nah I'm fine."

I grabbed out a broacher of a water park "alright so, here is all of the rides and slides we could go on, we will meet back at the entrance before leaving the park when it closes, and we have buy the entire weekend band so we don't have to keep paying, is that ok with you?" "Ya sounds perfect Dylan" we waited for another friend. I said "Joska, he is taking forever, by the time we get there we are going to have to pay a late fee for the hotel!" "Dude calm down I know that he is always late but he should be here soon" right after Joska said that we heard a knock on the door I opened it up to see a gray pegasus stallion with a short blue mane and tail with orange trim "Dude finally you're here we have been waiting forever! You got your stuff?" Lightning Ace showed me his bags "great Joska come on out and hang with Lightning" Joska went outside and I grabbed my bags and went outside, I called a taxi and got in.

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Once we got to the hotel, we all got out and ran into the hotel with our bags, I checked my watch "yes a minute to spare!" I thought I got to the counter and showed the mare working there my hotel receipt and she checked me and my 2 friends in and we each took our room key, we each had 3 different 1 pony rooms, we put our stuff down, and walked over to the waterpark.

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On our way to the water park we decided to go and grab something to eat, so we walked into a fast food place, and ordered, we waited and got our items then we went to our seats and ate. Once we finished we threw our leftovers out and continued to the waterpark. We walked for 10 minutes before reaching the waterpark which would be closing in 30 minutes. We figured that we wouldn't have enough time because of the lines, so we waited to buy our wristbands, we got to the booth and I told the pony working there "3 weekend wristbands" he nodded and gave me the 3 wristbands, I put my friends on for them and Joska put mine on me. We headed back to the hotel and settled down, I looked at my watch it was 6 PM, I stayed up a little longer and I heard snoring coming from both Joska and Lightnings room, I turned off the TV and went to sleep.

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